TMG Podcast/ Ep 86/ https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oZaELoru7Jk
This podcast covers many different stories and topics however the main one that is the title of the episode, is a story of Cody describing a strange interaction that he had at the gym. The intended audience is the middle school to college age range and people who enjoy comedy. The purpose of the podcast is solely just to entertain and make the audience laugh while providing some insight into the speakers lives. The speakers didn't really use any unique story telling devices besides humor. I find them to be very funny so I was highly entertained by this podcast. I would suggest that maybe they could use more elements like sound effects or on screen visuals.
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This interactive website serves to entertain and inform the audience of the dangers of tornadoes and the aftermath of them as well. It does this by showing pictures and weather reports that depict the dangerous weather and its effects. The intended audience of this website is anyone who has been affected by weather in their lives or is aware of dangerous weather. This website made me feel sad when it showed the pictures of Tuscaloosa in ruins after the tornado had torn through it. It made me think of how I would feel and react if a tornado came through my home town. I think the music and visuals of the website added in a new element that was very effective in helping the audience understand the impact of the situation.
My writing process for this essay was interesting. I had absolutely no idea what I wanted to write my story about until about two hours before the first rough draft was due. Then it hit me, and I just typed the entire thing without any real purpose in mind except to get that story into writing. The student conference was a big help for me, it really pointed me in the right direction. The first revision is always a big one for me and this essay was no exception. I hadn't written an actual story in a long time so I had a lot to do. I got rid of any unnecessary details that weren't important to the story while also adding important details where they needed to be. Then I worked on the structure a little to try and make sure it was cohesive. After that, I read it out loud to myself to get rid of sloppy and awkward sentences. For the second revision, I went back and tried to add more descriptive and sensory language in an attempt to show the audience rather than tell them. After peer revisions, I used their feedback to clean up little grammar things and to add in more descriptive language which was very helpful. Overall, this essay showed me a lot about myself as a writer. It proved to me that I can get in a groove when it comes to writing. I never thought that I would be able to have the patience to sit down and type over a thousand words in a few hours for a rough draft. This was actually super helpful because I had the whole story in front of me and I could just tweak things from there instead of worrying about finishing the story.
1. Did I format the dialogue correctly?
2. How can I avoid telling the audience instead of showing? 3. Did I provide too much context for my friends in the beginning? I feel like that paragraph went on a little long. Quite honestly I have no idea what I am going to write about but it will probably involve my high school so I am going to relate my senses to the wonderful Crystal Lake Central High School.
Sight: CLC is a very very old building with some parts that are renovated and others that haven't been looked at since the 1930's so it's a very strange contrast in that regard. Touch: Some parts of the building don't have Air Conditioning so in the beginning or end of the year, the areas without A/C were ridiculously humid and sometimes the floor felt sticky because of it. Smell: When I think of smells of CLC, I think of when the science classes would do some experiment that would stink up the hallways, senior pranks involving "Liquid Ass" spray that is just horrid, and the awful smell of mulch at the end of every year. Taste: Vending machine foods and drinks that were just a little bit off. Sound: The voices of loud teachers that I will never forget, people thinking they were cool playing music off of a speaker in the hallway, tons and tons of conversations in the cafeteria, crappy pop music playing on the loudspeaker during passing periods. The author's purpose in writing this piece is to try and show what it's like for both himself and an entire town to experience the devastation and aftermath of a tornado. He does this by describing the storm in great detail and how it affected his town. He also details his feelings on the whole thing and makes the audience feel for him. Speaking of the audience, the intended audience of this story seems to be very broad. I think anyone could read this story and understand what he was going for. I thought that the way he told his story in fragments was an interesting choice that definitely worked well for him. Overall, the author did a good job in making the reader understand and empathize for how he felt during the madness that is a tornado.
I clicked on Gannon's e portfolio. The three required pages are easy to locate and navigate by their respective tabs on the top right corner of the website. The website utilizes dark colors and themes such as the black background and the dark blue background of the homepage. There's not a lot of pictures besides the one on the home page that has a witty caption/description type thing above it that made me chuckle. It is clear what is important on each page and the darker tone/aesthetic definitely drew me in right away. Overall, I enjoyed the layout and tone of the website.
As I mentioned in a previous blog post, I was under the impression that I don't have much of a process. However, this essay showed to me that well maybe I kind of do. Although I am still quite the procrastinator, I definitely put a lot of thought into how I crafted this piece. After reading the source material for the first time I was able to pick out a few things that I saw as consistent throughout the story, but I didn't quite see the purpose of it. This left me with half of a thesis which wasn't going to cut it. Because of this I had to think about the author's intentions quite a bit and I found myself reading the story again trying to decipher the message. Once I was able to find a message that made sense to me, the thesis of my essay came to be. My next step was to go through the text again and point out the parts that backed my thesis. When writing, I write as much as I can off the top of my head until I hit a wall. Then I tend to read my work aloud to myself. This allows me to revise by try pointing out awkward flows, run on sentences, and fluff words so that I could restructure those parts. By the time I’m done doing that, I’m almost always able to break through that wall and another string of ideas comes to me. Another tool I use is the ever so helpful spelling and grammar tools in Microsoft Word. Where would we be without that gem of a resource. Using these handy underlines was a big help in cleaning up my work. Having peer reviews in class was also a massive help. Another set of eyes on your work is always helpful and was very helpful in my writing process. My peers pointed out things that I most likely wouldn’t have noticed and I’m very thankful for that. Overall, this essay made me realize my process more than I did before. 1. Can I have a little refresher on MLA format and citing sources?
2. How long should the intro be? 3. How many pieces of evidence should there be for each claim? |
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